Casualty Report: Victus, Rathuzad, Specialist

[Illumori Victus]

This evening, on Tatooine, near Republic Outpost Largona, Specialist Rathuzad Victus sustained a critical G.S.W. from a high powered bolt of some kind from an Imperial Sniper, directly in the T12, L1, and L2 Vertebral Subluxations of the lower spine during operations being conducted against Mandalorian forces reported to be in the area. Having been given the order to retreat back to Outpost Largona, Specialist Victus collapsed to one knee, calling for a medic. Without sufficient medical personnel on the scene, Specialist Victus' squad leader, Corporal Riike, did what he thought was best for the trooper and his squad's combat-readiness, applying multiple pain-killing stims and bandages to the best of his ability. With the amount of stimulants injected into Specialist Victus' bloodstream at the time, the trooper believed himself to be cured and continued, despite warnings and recommendations from his squad leader to remain behind, on to the next engagement at Imperial Outpost Rennar. During the movement to Imperial Outpost Rennar, the trooper claimed to have blurry vision, dizziness, loss of balance, and confusion. While conducting operations within the outpost, the unit took control of a small building. The building was subsequently stormed and bombarded by the excess of Mandalorians reported to have engaged Republic Forces during the operation. During the storming and bombardment of the building, Specialist Victus suffered a grenade blast and several rounds from the front, sending him sprawling backwards into the stairs behind him. Tripping on one of the stairs, Specialist Victus fell backwards, slamming his back into the stairway, without knowledge another grenade was lying directly under his back. Upon it's detonation, the trooper lost consciousness, and awoke back at Republic Outpost Largona, being attended to by a Medical Droid that was on sight. After repelling the Mandalorian attack on Republic Outpost Largona, Corporal Riike instructed Specialist Victus to call in his own CASEVAC, as he was dealing with the continued defense of the outpost and the unit. Specialist Victus proceeded to call in the CASEVAC, and Specialist "Doc" Jromwald, the unit's medic, responded immediately. After inspecting Specialist Victus, medical specialist on site determined he should be taken to infirmary immediately for recovery. Specialist Victus is currently being treated for severe spinal trauma, and recovering in the Republic Special Forces Infirmary at *CLASSIFIED* and remains insistent on returning to combat.

[Illumori Victus]

I see I have 22 views and a like, but it won't show me who liked it or viewed it. I am a very avid writer of fiction. Fantasy has always been my forte, but thanks to Star Wars I'm now interested in writing Sci-Fi. Because I take my writing so seriously and passionately, I would be very grateful for any feedback you guys may have, constructive criticism or praise. I hope you guys enjoyed this short story, I wrote it up in about 25 minutes, not counting the time it took to get the spelling right on the outposts and such.

The purpose of this report is to start the RP transition of Rathuzad moving out of Acoy and into MEU for the 1st Sergeant "Drill Instructor" position, and moving my Commando (who needs a rename for the first name as of right now) who has become my main into Acoy and out of MEU.

Thanks for reading.

~Victus

[Riike]

I linked it in the AAR too, double advertisement!

I think your writing style suits the Star-wars-meets-military theatre, and I encourage you to write more if it's something you love!

My only criticism is to try and avoid a wall-of-text by adding returns and spaces (forming paragraphs, in essence)